Live a life

LIVE A LIFE
BANG! When you hear that gunshot
You know a bullet’s coming in hot
A life has been claimed but you wished not
Gangs are everywhere, up to mischief
Getting some chicken and chips
Chilling
Planning do something insane
Guns, knives what good are they
Protection? No, no, no.
No excuse for carrying these lethal weapons it claims lives
Why? Why? Why?
How can this happen?
What should we do? Sit down or act? Do something! Stop this nightmare!
It’s getting worst
Young people, don’t join a gang it destroying peoples lives
That’s not the way live it is not a job
For what reason are these young people choosing to bring terror to other’s lives?
Overall crime has reduced but violent crime has risen
Stop crime like knife crime, violent crime and murders rise lets bring it down before you hear about another stabbing or killing
Young they’re growing
Young people can’t grow due to this madness
It makes them depressed, scared and worried
If this continues don’t be surprised that gangs are forming regularly
What do you think?
Is this the right thing to do or is it just in nature.
This isn’t a joke, it’s no game
Lets stop crime it’s the right thing to do
No more sitting down on your sofas saying that there shouldn’t be more crime
Well, you think so, so come on, show us you care, come out there and show no fear
How can WE stop this?
It’s up to YOU
Stand strong
Stop violence
Live a life.
Written by Super_drawing, Michael Faraday School
#Live a life
(This is my second final piece please ignore the other one i couldn't really think of much)
Comments (3)
Well done for returning to your poem and having a second go - editing is a really important part of the process! I like your used of rhetorical questions, and wonder whether you could elaborate on 'stand strong, stop violence, live a life'.
New Horizons Children's Academy 11 Feb 2019 in reply to Olivia @ the BNC's comment
I agree with you that maybe have a second go and make it a bit better because this just isn’t enough to get a star and yes I also like the way they/you put a rhetorical question.
Michael Faraday School 13 Feb 2019 in reply to Olivia @ the BNC's comment
can i try again and what do i need to do to get a star?
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